本科申请写作中的重大错误

 

在这篇文章中,我们将指出一些本科申请的个人写作中,很多同学们犯的常规错误。一方面,在本科申请的写作中,我们要知道该写哪些内容;但同样重要的是,同学们也需知道“不该写”什么,以免“误入雷区”,伤了评审委员的“法眼”。我们通过与多个知名大学的合作与咨询,了解了现在很多同学在写作上的误区。如果你有非常优异的成绩和非常突出的社会活动,而申请依然被拒绝,那么很有可能问题出现在个人写作上哦~

 

下面将列举三个比较有代表性的例子:

Vignette1: I’ve always had a fascination with science. When I was little, my dad would ask me to name all of the elements of the Periodic Table, a skill that would come in handy during chemistry class. Since my dad taught me so much about science – and chemistry in particular – as a child, I’ve since found that the discipline comes easily to me. I often find myself frustrated in class because other students aren’t able to grasp chemical reactions as easily but I’ve learned to accept this.

解析:这段话的硬伤是作者太自大和浮躁。她想表达自己对化学以及自然科学有很强的天份,但绝不应该采用打压其他同学的方法。She in fact claims that chemistry comes easily to her and that other students don’t grasp the material as easily! Oy vey! 即使她是一个高分生,在校成绩和SAT都非常突出,这份申请也难逃厄运。

Vignette 2: “Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don’t matter and those who matter don’t mind.” I’ve always loved this Dr. Seuss quote. It personifies so much of what I believe and who I am. Dr. Seuss remains one of my favorite authors today, maybe because his work influences my life on a daily basis.”

解析:现在的个人写作中,越来越多的人喜欢以引用的方式开头。有的时候能达成不错的效果,但很多时候却适得其反,尤其是在文章后面没有很好的结构和内容做支撑。现在越来越多的评审委员对于“引用式文章”表现出了反感。学校要了解的是申请者个人的思想和见解,而不是某个名人的观点。

Vignette 3: “My grandfather had a rule. We were to read at least ten pages before bed. In many ways, my grandfather inspired my love of reading. My grandfather was born in Poland during the Second World War. He came to this country on a boat with not a penny to his name and, yet, he achieved the American Dream.”

解析:现在也有很多学生在个人写作中大谈其父母、祖父母、或者家族中最有成就的亲人对自己的影响。Well,这个写作方式并没有错,但是特别需要注意的是,介绍家族成员的篇幅一定要控制好,重点放在后面其对自己的影响,自己因此变成了怎样一个人。很多同学一介绍起“爷爷奶奶爸爸妈妈叔叔阿姨”来就刹不住车,从而影响了整片文章的质量。记住,个人写作是有字数要求的,评审文员希望看到的是一个真实的、全面的你,而非你的“成功亲戚”。

希望本文能为大家在个人写作的环节提供帮助,毕竟,个人写作是申请大学非常重要的一关。 如果大家有任何问题,欢迎咨询荣生。

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